My Planit writing Ing Ang Ooo

Create and Describe Your Own Planet - Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6

Purpose of this piece of writing is to:

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features
to make my writing interesting and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.

I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make my
writing interesting and engaging (simile, metaphor,
alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic specific words
to include in my writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Focus

We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a descriptive piece
of writing to promote your imaginary planet. You aim is to convince people to move to your planet.
You want your writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is like on your planet.

First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from the Avatar movie.
Click here to get to video= Pandora.

Second, we will discuss together what you will need in your work to make it successful
and look at how to plan our work. Then you will plan your work and check with a teacher
before you start writing.

Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete you piece of writing. Remember to proofread
(check spelling and punctuation) and edit (does it make sense? do you need to change any sentences?)
yourself and with a buddy and fill in your self and peer-assessment.
Check it with a teacher.

Then share your work on your blog.

My writing

Ing Ang Ooo is a planet far away from Earth. It is located
out between the Kuiper Belt and the Oort cloud.
You can get there by a rocket ship. It is made up of oxygen,
little bits of rock ,

water ,dry sand and grass it takes months  to get there.
The creatures on the planet they are friendly and harmless.
They are blue with big eyes and a big smiley mouths also they
have red round spikes on their head.
They live in the gravitational seas area.
In this planet there are four parts, the desert side,
the snow that falls from rain, gravitational seas and trees
that rain grass. Ing Ang Ooo planet is actually upside down
but when your in their it doesn't feel upside down.

What is inside the planet? Well inside Ing Ang Ooo there are clouds.
 The snow that falls their turns into clouds that you can sit on.
Because the planet Ing Ang Ooo is so big you can use the clouds to
sit on to get to place to place like a car. Just lean
which way you want to go. When you get to the gravitational
seas you will find the friendly creatures hiding in their waterproof mushrooms.
They speak a different language so you can't communicate with them!
If you are lucky you might find the famous glitter gem rock.
Scientists have been wanting to find these for years.
They mostly float around.

As you can see Ing Ang Ooo land is amazing. Who wouldn’t
want to go! By Nevey.