Descriptive Writing

At the moment in our class we have been working on descriptive writing. We have been using pictures to give us ideas of what to write about. Here is the peace of writing I did.


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The Abandoned city

As I walk through the emerald green wild bush I hunted a deer it ran as fast as lightning.

The deer lead me too deep into the wild colourful bush

I seen a huge stone grey dingy building covered in moss vines and mold. I got closer to the old building

It lead me to a lot more buildings and even more it was an abandoned city. I was amazed i said to
myself I have never seen anything so amazing!
I ran into what looked like the city center it was like a hole new

World!

I took my time walking into one of the huge dirty old buildings there were three levels the rooms were
covered in moss and old wallpaper. i touched the old bumpy rippling wall and suddenly BANG!
CRASH! The wall tumbled to the ground. The rocky mist covered my eyes  I could not see I made my
way out through a window i could not see the door i was so scared i would get squished.
Their it went again BANG CRASH the three story building went crashing and tumbling just from a
gentle touch! With rock flying everywhere like a meteor shower I moved away from the tumbling
dirty building i knew not to touch the buildings any more. Their was still plenty more buildings like
churches and old shops also houses and workplaces. I walked to the dark dirty church i could smell
old fish but no they were dead people on the disgusting moldy ground they had fallen down the
squeaky floorboards i was shocked at the sight of dead people and the smell of fish! I ran back
home to my family and I kept the whole city a secret from that day on i keeped having more adventure
at the city.